Amelia WIP

bdartstudio · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 9:25 am Post subject:

What outlines are you talking about? I didnt put any.
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Saiklor · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 11:27 am Post subject:

the vertical black line that separate the sections of her tail?

bdartstudio · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 11:46 am Post subject:

those arent outlines.
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Saiklor · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 12:18 pm Post subject:

well that's why I asked before "are they just place-holders until you get the shadows in place?"

whatever they are, they don't mesh with the rest of it. If they are placeholders until you shade it then it's a non-issue because they will eventually leave, but if they are part of the shading then that's a problem. Look at her body, everything is softly lit with colourful shadows and no particularly dark areas, why would her tail have such starkly drawn dark areas? I know it's a shiny surface, where her skin is more matte, and so it would react to the light differently, but it still seems like outlines that dark are sort of out of place.

veinglory · Writing Forum Moderator Joined: 02 Oct 2002 Posts: 3120

Then what are they? They look like outlines to me.
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bdartstudio · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 2:27 pm Post subject:

I left such a short message because I had to leave suddenly while I was about to explain the dark. Obviously I am not done with the fin. There is alot left to do and the dark lines.. were mid-shading where I had left off. heres a little more I managed to do. There is still ALOT of work left on the fin so please keep that in mind when giving crits..which are welcome.

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bdartstudio · Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 4:13 pm Post subject:

Ok I put the layer with the background surprise on... got to a paint with it that i like... not done but almost!

oh yeah... I added some hieght to the canvas... i think she needed some more room Smile

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bdartstudio · Posted: Thu Oct 15, 2009 9:01 pm Post subject:

Latest update. Although I really didnt do much but workon the city in tha background. My BF said it didnt resemble a city before so I worked on it a bit and set the layer to soft light. looks more distant now.

I also just got painter 9. LOVE IT! Now I see what Mel is always raving about Smile

I still need to work on the hair...

Whats buggin me most is the face. Somehow it dont look quite right to me... but I checked it all and it mesures out as far as i can tell.. anyone wanna chime in on this for me?

Anything else?

I still have alot of work on the corals still... just so ya know... Smile

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faerywitch · Registered Member Joined: 20 Feb 2006 Posts: 4015

Hi Jen,

I see a few problems with this image. One is the face, it really is not working, maybe try to define better her jawline? And from this angle the face looks like if it had a flat structure. The line where the tail meets the flesh looks very smudgy, I would refine that further. And her hand looks like if it was lacking bones.
The sand looks unrefined, so you might actually still be working on that.
The structures on the background. The curvy one is leading the eye away from the mermaid, so I would just flip it. The straight one is perfectly aligned with that very straight coral, I would just move it a bit to one side or the other.

I really like the fish and corals, and the colors you went for. You have pushed yourself a lot in this one!
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veinglory · Writing Forum Moderator Joined: 02 Oct 2002 Posts: 3120

It's coming along well but I think the curvy building looks a bit too much like the Sydney Opera house.
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bdartstudio · Posted: Thu Oct 15, 2009 10:08 pm Post subject:

it supposed to look like the opera house

This picture is from the short story I am writing. Check the first post... its there in a very very short synopsis... Smile

Glad it was recognized though
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bdartstudio · Posted: Thu Oct 15, 2009 10:10 pm Post subject:

[quote="faerywitch"]Hi Jen,

I see a few problems with this image. One is the face, it really is not working, maybe try to define better her jawline? And from this angle the face looks like if it had a flat structure. The line where the tail meets the flesh looks very smudgy, I would refine that further. And her hand looks like if it was lacking bones.
The sand looks unrefined, so you might actually still be working on that.
The structures on the background. The curvy one is leading the eye away from the mermaid, so I would just flip it. The straight one is perfectly aligned with that very straight coral, I would just move it a bit to one side or the other.

I really like the fish and corals, and the colors you went for. You have pushed yourself a lot in this one![/quote]

Ok face.. yes will work on that..
Havent done much with the hands yet.. but will..
still working the flesh tail area.. yes it is smudgy will tackle that too
Buildings... ok..will lookinto that..

Glad you like the corals.. Smile

thats my fav part too..
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bdartstudio · Posted: Tue Nov 03, 2009 4:23 pm Post subject:

made some changes to the one hand.. she will be holding somehting soon.

Can some one check the hand for me... is it going right? Ive redone it several times now..

the seaweed around her waist is not done...

Comments?

might be while before i post again.. been very busy with work and school
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bdartstudio · Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2009 8:35 am Post subject:

made some changes... worked onthe one arm mainly...hopeing am on right track....

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Riana · Registered Member Joined: 10 Sep 2006 Posts: 465

Both hands will looke more natural when you draw the fingers with a little bit more space between them.

Regarding the "holding hand": I´d suggest to tone down the sharp lines on her wrist where the palm is attached a bit so the hand doesnt look too attached to her arm. I am also not sure about the curve of her underarm, it looks a bit to strong to me. Do you use a reference photo?

You did a real good job with the fishs! Dont loose the patience, it will be a nice painting when you finish the main figure with the same amount of details and careful shading.
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